Thesis Statements

Identifying the weak thesis statement Exercise:

1. Sentence A is the weakest thesis statement because it makes no claim. It just boldly states that they will be writing about the concerns with evolution in The Origin of the Species.

2. Sentence A is the weakest thesis statement because it also makes no claim. It also is something that is obvious, that one’s college education is to better understand others’ point of view.

3.Sentence B is the weakest thesis statement because although it makes an argument it’s too blunt, it makes no specific claim. I also find that the sentence makes a personal conviction.

4.Sentence A is weak in its thesis statement again because it makes no claim. Just simply states that the play Othello is a play on jealousy and love. Rather than going into depth on how they know it is just based on jealousy and love.

5.Sentence B is the weakest statement because I found that it was a personal conviction being made. Although, it did state that the emotional lyrics would appeal to the targeted audience.

*My thesis: He thought to himself, he was no soldier. There had to have been a mistake in the numbers. The history of the draft, this boy would become part of that history. The history that made him, go and fight and come back a coward.

*Why would he come back a coward? I believe that this is a strong thesis because it can be arguable. It can be arguable because the mistake of the numbers. I also think it’s strong because it states the topic that is going to be talked about. I can easily support it by articles talking about how the draft worked and how each person was selected.